I didn't say the subject was bad, I said the writing sucked.
The excerpt I quoted was isolated like a paragraph, but I don't remember a paragraph being 2 poorly written sentences.
How would I have worded it? For one I would have presented one side of the entire story, and then an opposing view-point (i.e. the view point of Theranos execs), instead of "person a said x. person y said x'".
I guess I'm sorry I'd prefer writing hidden behind a pay wall to be a little more elegant than what an 8 year old could write.
The excerpt I quoted was isolated like a paragraph, but I don't remember a paragraph being 2 poorly written sentences.
How would I have worded it? For one I would have presented one side of the entire story, and then an opposing view-point (i.e. the view point of Theranos execs), instead of "person a said x. person y said x'".
I guess I'm sorry I'd prefer writing hidden behind a pay wall to be a little more elegant than what an 8 year old could write.
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